unholy sonnet

Here's something new. I've remixed the form of my sonnet, putting it into a Prezi presentation. If you haven't heard of Prezi, it is an amazing zoomable presentation tool that puts PowerPoint to shame. I don't know how much its artistic possibilities have been exploited, but this is a shot at rethinking an old form within a new one. I've made a movie out of the Prezi, which you can play, or you can click here to go to the Prezi presentation itself, which you can click through at your leisure (sequentially or not). You can also copy and remix the presentation for your own purposes if you wish. All in the spirit of remix culture!  Anyway, I'd love feedback from anyone on how this works. How does experiencing the sonnet in these different forms change its feel, its effect?





unholy sonnet
by Gideon Burton

to try to trace this rivering desire
to face this shivering of fire and ache
this trembling to require a bloodied blade
a muddied, scabbed, persistence of desire

oppresses me it presses me a shade
of wanting haunting me with buried fire
a darkly embered orange smoke a choir
and chorus, coarsely chanting sooty fate

I taste I waste a prey of praying's grace
unwieldy, not so wholly holy, ghost
and knotted flesh compounding tears and time

and time again to groan toward his face
with blinking stutttered broken breaking hopes
I claw the bread I claim the spilling wine

Feel free to copy, imitate, remix, or redistribute this poem as long as you give proper acknowledgment of authorship. (This goes for the Prezi presentation, too!)